I spoke French for thirteen years
I say to him
And he smiles.
More cheese.
Soft night yields to love,
Rap is the only hard night sound,
The White man is out of his depth,
Even in French.
He leans forward and whispers in my ear but,
The first lie was mine.
We’ll count them later,
In the fullness of time.
see – nigger, whore, bitch!
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evocative short poetry – words move
Star Ka’at says:
February 16, 2011 at 5:19 pm (Edit)
Wow, strong and yet subtle.
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Jingle says:
February 16, 2011 at 5:27 pm (Edit)
abstract and smart one.
Thanks for sharing with potluck.
A++
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tigerbrite says:
February 16, 2011 at 5:39 pm (Edit)
Like it. But couldn’t find the ‘like’ button
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Paula Tohline Calhoun says:
February 18, 2011 at 8:27 pm (Edit)
I love this one, and how you manage to fuse the humor with the pathos!
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[...] I spoke French for thirteen years I say to him And he smiles. More cheese. Soft night yields to love, Rap is the only hard night sound, The White man is out of his depth, Even in French. He leans forward and whispers in my ear but, The first lie was mine. We'll count them later, In the fullness of time. -visit my postaday2011 blog - ♦photos/webstockpro.com♦ … Read More [...]
Yours is the kind of love poetry I really enjoy reading. It was 100% genuine without coming across as overly cheesy. It was also sensual without being raunchy. I love all of the bits of information we get and also the way you hold back to deepen the mystery of the whole piece. I especially like the next to last couplet where he leans forward and whispers to you. You say so much right there without needing to say anything else at all.
Kudos to you for writing an amazing poem.
that’s a nice smile… that’s a nice smile… that’s a nice smile… [:-)]
Reading this is just seemss.. soft! I very much enjoyed it!
-Roxanne
Ooohh… sensuous and mysterious!! And with all the cheese, yummmmiiiee too
Those last 2 lines were simply WOW!! Time can be very inconsequential when you are with someone special… but otherwise, it seems to show its full presence!
A good one, my friend..
Subtle … well done. Like the ending “…. in the fullness of time …”
loved it
we will count them later
in the fullness of time”
right now there are better things to do
time will tell…you handled this one with a loveliness and care, tenderness in new discovery…awesome as usual. You know you have the magic touch
soft lies and passion soft words…shared and no need for counting. Lovely…xPenx
See you are nominated by Jingle for this week’s award. Agree
Ooh, so mysterious
I like how you build up so much atmosphere and passion without giving bawdy or explicit imagery. It’s all very hush hush and done with PERFECT poetic skill! 
new sense of love poetry…..
thanks for commenting on my poem. thanks
Ooooo, I do like this one. You write good love poetry.
mmmmmmm sexy! and also, mmm cheese.